The toughest in the universe

Hey im gonna make a Fanfic with Paul.Its gonna be about....Nah il let you see it!!

Main Character:
Paul Phoenix

Helpers:
Marshall Law
Steve Fox
Jin Kazama

Enemies:
Kazuya Mishima
Kuma II

And the Characters not listed might apper once in a while as guests....

Nice!

Great!

it sounds like a fun fan fic.

i'm waiting...

I think you should post your first chapter

...im having difficulties

I am sorry for you.
(sorry for the very very late reply)

Marshall, Paul and Steve was training in Marshalls dojo when it suddenly knocked on the door.
Marshall opened and saw a millitary soldier the soldier asked to see Paul Phoenix.
Paul came out to him
"Who the hell are you?"
"I am working for Jin Kazama"
"Jin Kazama!? That weird guy who won the tournament?"
"Yes him he wants to have your help"
"OHHH YEAH I GOT WORK!!"
"...but you won't get paid"
Paul sad went out to ask Marshall and Steve if they wanted to come too which they did
The three of them left to see Jin
When they saw Jin he took his hand out to them and said in a polite way
"Its nice to see you here Paul and who are you friends"
Steve stepped forward
"Hi im Steve Fox ive been training with Paul and Marshall for a while"
Then Marshall stepped forward
"Hey im Marshall Law me and Paul are best friends we've been that since the first Tekken tournament"
Jin welcomed then and told them to go into the conference room they said okay and went in there
In the room was some chairs and the three sat on them while Jin explained about G Corporation and the Mishima Zaibutsu and how things were working out
Paul got bored and stopped Jin in the middle of explination yelling
"So your saying our job is to into the G Corpo..something and smash some skulls?"
Jin shurgged and said yes
"You will go tommorow for now get some sleep"
Jin called a assistent and told her to lead them into their rooms
But Jin wasn't expecting three persons so all three had to lay in the same bed

End of Chapter 1

Personally....i think il get better over time but what do you guyst think?

I guess no one likes this

KazuyaFreak wrote:I guess no one likes this

give it time
I enjoyed it

No, it was good, you should just change the way the course of the story goes, it was kinda rapid. Try to describe appearance of the characters, places etc. Also the dialogue was short, try to lengthen it a bit.
I liked the idea, let's wait for the next chapter!